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This was a great read! It was really detailed, but I agree with Jericho when he mentions that the content should be a bit more 'bulky', so to speak. I also think that the content should have been arranged more clearly, and it may be a good idea to include sources to your article in order to improve its reliability. I've subscribed!

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Thank you so much! I agree with you and Jericho. It should have been more meaty and arranged properly. I am just learning this and a lot of other things at once.

Thank you so much for subscribing :)

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No worries! I look forward to your next article :)

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Happy Belated Indpendence day! Came from the link on Reddit. I don't have a ton of writing experience so take my feedback with a grain of salt... Overall tone is on point, but the paragraphs shouldn't all be one sentence. Should probably go a bit more in depth, and there are some punctuation and grammar issues, but overall a good informative article on an interesting topic that will only become more important!

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Thank you so much, Jericho! You are right. I also believe that it should have had more meat. I will try next time.

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